Intermezzo: Inflation in the English Language

Those of you who know me have heard endlessly about the laughable simplicity of contemporary English sentence structure. There is no avoiding it if you want readers. Not by you, not by me.

The combination of English sentence structure and reader's expectations forces a writer to compose primarily in sentences that consist of subject-verb-object or subect-predicate. The only possible diversity is to toss in an adverb.

As I repeatedly emphasize and just did with a literary agent, the English language per se is NOT chained to this sentence structure. It is the English language IN ADDITION TO readers' expectations.

Readers want it fast!!!

So in my translation of a website right now I have this little sentence in German:

weil Patienten häufig nicht in ausreichender Anzahl ins Krankenhaus kommen (literally: because patients often do not come in sufficient number to the hospital)

Now in Spenser or translations of Ariosto you regularly find constructions similar to this literal translation of the German. In fact you find them all the way through H. James and even into the twentieth century. 

But just for amusement, I typed "in sufficient number" into a book search engine and immediately stumbled upon some book by Fiske called 10,000 alternatives to wordy phrases. He included exactly this phrase in his book, and he didn't just streamline it to what I wrote in the translation (often a sufficient number of...), he actually made the sentence even faster, without a genitive: "enough patients".

This wordy phrase "in sufficient number", by which he means a sentence that slows the reading process, now fits perfectly in the paradigm of subject-verb-object or subject-predicate.

In fact, when you type this phrase into a search engine, it is remarkable how the hits largely date back to the early twentieth century, except for Fiske's, which tells you to eliminate any retardation of reading process.

Now we are moving on to flash fiction in literature. I will examine this later, but it is unlikely that flash fiction, which is fiction in under a thousand words, is unlikely to deviate from my thesis. In fact, a short structural framework and SVO or SP suggests to me that we are seeing staggering inflation in the text. Is the English language also laying the groundwork for extremely high inflation in the future?
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